Yay!
I strongly dislike emo, i think most emo bands are crap and all they play is palm muted power chords with basic picking. All the vocals are poorly written and executed in a whiney fashion, bands like Senses Fail use stupid similies, for example, "You watch me fall like New York in an earthquake". These angst ridden teens couldn't play like those of Dream Theater or Iron Maiden even if they were possesed by Joe Satriani or Yngwie Malmsteen. There is some OK!!! emo out there. Like Brand New and TBS, and Dashboard(if you can consider that emo). My taste covers a wide spectrum of music, everything from Coldplay, to Dimmu Borgir to Dream Theater to most classic rock, emo is faint in my spectrum of music. Major improving to do. Well your flash certainly covered the aspects of an emo song. But some improvements can be made.